That'd be a really long introduction, though. ^-~

you've clearly put a lot of thought into how it works.

I try to. I've found that, certainly for me, the best way to fix something is to figure out why things are broken (or not). It's actually really helpful to write it down and force the words into more than just a feeling. ^-^

As I was telling jjhunter I'd certainly be willing to work on a meta post about revising poetry, but since this way of editing is also pretty new to me I'd like to revise the poem at least once more before I start on a meta post. I know I've revised poetry before, but not like this and I haven't written poetry in a couple of years. It's a wholly new method to me too.